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I enjoy eating my grandma's kimchi stew.

I eat this when I'm feeling down at school.

A few years ago, I had a sad experience at school.

I confided in my grandmother, telling her about it.

Upon hearing that, my grandmother cooked kimchi stew so that she could cheer me up.

When I eat it, it makes my mood improve a bit.

My grandmother immediately caught on to that.

Since then, whenever my grandmother sees that I don't seem to be in a good mood, she makes kimchi stew for me.

I feel my grandmother’s love when I eat it.

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그리고 같은 단어(명사)가 반복되면 뒤에 단어는 대명사로 바꾸시길....

"I enjoy eating my grandma's kimchi stew. I eat it when I'm feeling down at school. A few years ago, I had a sad experience at school, so I confided in my grandmother and told her about it. Upon hearing that, my grandmother cooked kimchi stew to cheer me up. When I eat it, my mood improves a bit. My grandmother immediately caught on to that. Since then, whenever she sees that I'm not in a good mood, she makes kimchi stew for me. I feel my grandmother’s love when I eat it."

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