영어 수행 번역 잘 됐나요?

질문자님, 안녕하세요.

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번역하신 부분에서 몇 가지 수정 및 제안을 드리고자 합니다.

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1. **Greetings and Introduction:**

- Original: "Hello, I would like to introduce myself from now on."

- Revised: "Hello, I would like to introduce myself."

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2. **Name:**

- Original: "First of all, my name is '이름'."

- Revised: "First of all, my name is [Your Name]."

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3. **Age and School:**

- Original: "I am 17 years old and I am attending '학교 이름' High School."

- Revised: "I am 17 years old and I attend [School Name] High School."

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4. **Book and Interests:**

- Original: "I am reading a book called 'Oh My God, World History' these days. This book is easy and interesting as it deals with various medical advancements."

- Revised: "These days, I am reading a book called 'Oh My God, World History.' This book is easy and interesting because it covers various medical advancements."

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5. **Bucket List:**

- Original: "Also, my bucket list is to observe the aurora."

- Revised: "One item on my bucket list is to observe the aurora."

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6. **Hobbies:**

- Original: "Lastly, I enjoy playing Tetris game very much."

- Revised: "Lastly, I enjoy playing Tetris very much."

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7. **Closing:**

- Original: "That is all for the presentation. Thank you."

- Revised: "That is all for my presentation. Thank you."

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**Revised Version:**

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```

Hello, I would like to introduce myself. First of all, my name is [Your Name]. I am 17 years old and I attend [School Name] High School. These days, I am reading a book called 'Oh My God, World History.' This book is easy and interesting because it covers various medical advancements. One item on my bucket list is to observe the aurora. Lastly, I enjoy playing Tetris very much. That is all for my presentation. Thank you.

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이렇게 수정하면 좀 더 자연스럽고 명확한 영어 자기소개가 될 것입니다. 도움이 되셨기를 바랍니다!