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In today's information society, where social media's influence is significant, various problems have emerged. One of the most notable issues is cyberbullying. Cyberbullying causes mental harm by persistently attacking a specific target using communication devices.
To prevent such cyberbullying, parents must first guide their children correctly. In an experiment by a media outlet, it was found that a person's character and personality are formed at home. This means that children's character is shaped by their home environment and their parents' teachings. Therefore, if parents wisely educate their children, it is expected that they will grow into individuals who respect systems like ethics and morals, making them less likely to engage in unethical behaviors like bullying others.
Secondly, institutions such as schools should educate on proper internet usage. According to a paper by an author from Seoul National University, 58.2% of juvenile cybercrime incidents come from 'ignorance.' The lack of understanding of cyberspace causes them not to realize that their actions constitute a crime. Therefore, if schools regularly provide internet education, not only can it improve students' understanding of the internet, but it can also make them more cautious about their actions.
We all have a duty to block the problem of cyberbullying and create a proper internet culture. Therefore, efforts must be made both individually and socially.
아 참고로 서울대 논문 얘기는 지어낸 거라 무시해주세요 어법적으로 틀린 문장 있는지랑 관계대명사, 수동태, 분사, 전치사+ing가 적절히 사용된 거 같은지 좀 봐주세요
To prevent such cyberbullying, parents must first guide their children correctly. In an experiment by a media outlet, it was found that a person's character and personality are formed at home. This means that children's character is shaped by their home environment and their parents' teachings. Therefore, if parents wisely educate their children, it is expected that they will grow into individuals who respect systems like ethics and morals, making them less likely to engage in unethical behaviors like bullying others.
Secondly, institutions such as schools should educate on proper internet usage. According to a paper by an author from Seoul National University, 58.2% of juvenile cybercrime incidents come from 'ignorance.' The lack of understanding of cyberspace causes them not to realize that their actions constitute a crime. Therefore, if schools regularly provide internet education, not only can it improve students' understanding of the internet, but it can also make them more cautious about their actions.
We all have a duty to block the problem of cyberbullying and create a proper internet culture. Therefore, efforts must be made both individually and socially.
아 참고로 서울대 논문 얘기는 지어낸 거라 무시해주세요 어법적으로 틀린 문장 있는지랑 관계대명사, 수동태, 분사, 전치사+ing가 적절히 사용된 거 같은지 좀 봐주세요