영어 수행평가인데 어색하거나 고쳐야 할 문장 있나요?

대부분 문법적으로는 나쁘지 않게 적었는데요. 어색한 부분이 많네요.

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I will introduce the quokka.

보다는 I will introduce the quokka to you.

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It lives on Rottnest Island in Australia

보다는 Its habitat is the Rottnest Island of Australia

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It has round ears.

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The color of the fur is brown with a gray color.

보다는 Its fur is brown with a shade of gray.

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This animal whose favorite food is grass or leaves is a herbivore.

이건 문법적으로도 맞지 않아요.

Its favourite food is grass and leaves, as it is a herbivore.

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An interesting fact is that it's a looming fine with a smile.

이건 무슨 말인지 모르겠어요. looming fine을 무슨 뜻으로 생각하고 쓴거죠?

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Quokka has a charming smile.

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So it is famous as the happiest animal in the world.

보다는 So it is best known as the happiest animal in the world.

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But quokka is an endangered species.

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You have to pay a fine if you touch a quokka because you are deceived by a bright smile.

두 문단의 흐름이 이상해요. 코카를 만지면 벌금을 내는게 미소에 홀리는거랑 무슨 상관이죠?

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I want to see this animal!