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Writing task1
The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This bar chart shows house’s average price change in five years and next five years about 5 different metropolises compared with the average house price in 1989.
At first, we realise that the average house price between 1990 and 1995 is less than 1989’s house average price. Therefore, because house price is decided by supply and demand, we realize that supply of house would have been increase or demand of house would have been decrease in this term. However, The demand of house is generally getting increase in metropolis such as New York or London, because people normally want to move into there to get a good job or to be served better cultural things like theater or museum.Consequently, I think governments would have encouraged to build more house in 5 years.
After 1995, Most of cities average house price was soared. Particularly, London was a city that most be soared compared with other cities. London was soared almost 20% than in 1989. New York was soared 10% as well. But Just Frankfurt was a bit decreased 1%. Even though house price is continuously being increased due to be influenced by inflation, I think London was soared rapidly than other cities. Therefore, The government of London should publish a new house policy.
This bar chart shows house’s average price change in five years and next five years about 5 different metropolises compared with the average house price in 1989.
At first, we realise that the average house price between 1990 and 1995 is less than 1989’s house average price. Therefore, because house price is decided by supply and demand, we realize that supply of house would have been increase or demand of house would have been decrease in this term. However, The demand of house is generally getting increase in metropolis such as New York or London, because people normally want to move into there to get a good job or to be served better cultural things like theater or museum.Consequently, I think governments would have encouraged to build more house in 5 years.
After 1995, Most of cities average house price was soared. Particularly, London was a city that most be soared compared with other cities. London was soared almost 20% than in 1989. New York was soared 10% as well. But Just Frankfurt was a bit decreased 1%. Even though house price is continuously being increased due to be influenced by inflation, I think London was soared rapidly than other cities. Therefore, The government of London should publish a new house policy.
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