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In digital age of these days, /there are various problems that were arisen/

as artificial intelligence technology/ develops rapidly.

First of all,/ as mentioned before,/ due to the development of artificial intelligence,/

most of the jobs may be automated/ and/ are leading to a decrease in people's jobs./

Additionally, /one day, /humans may be dominated by highly developed artificial intelligence,

/ and/ personal information/ may /be used/ and be leaked/ without permission /

as artificial intelligence( collects, analyzes, and learns) large amounts of personal information. /

Therefore, in order to solve these problems,/ we/ must/ establish (a strict legal system) and (personal information protection laws )for( artificial intelligence), /

developing artificial intelligence more accurately/( through continuous research), and solve these problems (through cooperation a the various aspects of artificial intelligence to help society.

But I think the most important thing /is to continue to research/ how to (use and utilize) the various and every aspects of artificial intelligence to help society.

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요즘 같은 디지털 시대에 인공지능 기술이 빠르게 발전하면서 생기는 다양한 문제점들이 있다. 우선 앞서 말했듯이, 인공지능의 발전으로 인해 대다수의 직업들이 자동화가 되어 사람들의 일자리가 감소할 수 있다. 또한 언젠가는 인간이 고도로 발달된 인공지능에게 지배당할 수도 있으며, 인공지능이 대량의 개인정보를 수집하여 분석하고 학습하는 과정에서 개인정보가 무단으로 사용되고 유출될 수 있다. 그래서 이러한 문제점들을 해결하기 위해서는 인공지능에 대한 엄격한 법적 제도와 개인정보보호 법규를 마련해야 하며, 지속적인 연구를 통해 인공지능을 더욱더 정확하게 개발하고 다양한 전문가들과의 협력과 논의를 통해 이러한 문제점들을 해결해 나가야 한다. 하지만 무엇보다도 중요한 것은 인공지능의 다양한 점들을 잘 활용해서 어떻게 해야 사회의 많은 도움이 될지 계속해서 연구해야 하는 것이라고 생각한다.

In today's digital age, several problems arise as artificial intelligence technology rapidly advances. Firstly, as mentioned earlier, the rapid development of artificial intelligence may lead to the automation of many jobs, resulting in a reduction in available employment opportunities for people. Moreover, there is the concern that highly advanced artificial intelligence might eventually dominate humans, potentially leading to unauthorized collection, analysis, and dissemination of personal information. To address these issues, it is imperative to establish a rigorous legal framework and enact personal information protection laws specific to artificial intelligence. Continuous research is also vital to enhance the precision of artificial intelligence and tackle these challenges through collaboration and discussions with experts in various fields. However, the most crucial aspect is ongoing research into how to leverage the diverse capabilities of artificial intelligence to benefit society. 이렇게 수정하시면 조금 더 문법적으로 맞고 자연스러우세요!

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