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 It was honor for me to have an interview with Moma design studio. Thank you for your interest to my resume and portfolio. Although I couldn't have the chance in interview, I wonder what was the reasons that made you choose me for a candidate at first, what was interesting for you and which part can I improve in my portfolio? If you help me, it will definitely help me a lot. 

Thank you for your time again

Sincerely yours, 

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It was indeed an honor for me to have an opportunity to have a telephone interview provided by Moma Design Studio. I do appreciate for your interests in my resume and portfolio. However, it seemed like that I did not do well in your telephone interview test. Could you please let me know the reason why I was failed in your telephone interview test? Besides, I'm wondering about what was your interest in my portfolio in the beginning stage and wondering whether you can give me some tips for me to improve my portfolio. With your kind help, it definitely would help me a lot in future. 

 

Thank you

Yours sincerely 

000